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A Murder Of Crowes, Complete

A Murder Of Crowes.

I've done absolutely no proofreading on it (seriously: none), so I appologoze for its roughness.

I think I'll leave it up until Wednesday and then take it down, do some actual editting on it, polish it up, and fire it off to Ellerly Queen Mystery Magazine Wish me luck.

Posted on November 06, 2005





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***possible spoiler***
Not too shabby. I'm not a big mystery reader but this kept me reading.

I gotta admit, I thought it would turn out that Crowes was having an affair with Quiring himself, due to Quiring's non-gender-specific language when talking about Crowes being with "someone" in the neighborhood, "a person," etc.

Posted by: MadMonkey on November 7, 2005 07:54 AM

Nice crime mystery. I also am not a big crime mystery reader but read the story from start to end. Now I want to read the next chapter where the police department hires Denver to be a detective!

On a differnt note, I also live in Seattle and I have a 4 year old son so I have greatly enjoyed reading about your adventures with the Squirelly. I keep hoping that someday I can run into you on the street and yell, "Oh my god! It's Matthew Balwin!"

Posted by: Seanmodious on November 7, 2005 09:55 AM

Ok, I didn't preview my post, sorry for the typo on your name Mr. Baldwin. :-)

Posted by: Seanmodious on November 7, 2005 10:38 AM

Enjoyed the story. Much better than the movie.

Posted by: trinamick on November 7, 2005 11:23 AM

I'm very impressed. Thanks for taking the initiative! I enjoyed your story very much. I attempted to write along with you, but fell off at the 1,000 word mark. Since I've never attempted fiction at all whatsoever, it will take a while to figure out how not to write stupid dialogue. You've inspired me to try to finish it though. Thanks.

Posted by: Wendy on November 7, 2005 02:55 PM

I'm very impressed. Thanks for taking the initiative! I enjoyed your story very much. I attempted to write along with you, but fell off at the 1,000 word mark. Since I've never attempted fiction at all whatsoever, it will take a while to figure out how not to write stupid dialogue. You've inspired me to try to finish it though. Thanks.

Posted by: Wendy on November 7, 2005 02:55 PM

Hey, that was a really good story! Good luck getting it in Ellery Queen.

Posted by: Squirrelly on November 7, 2005 06:06 PM

Loved it.

Posted by: Kirk on November 8, 2005 06:44 AM

*spoilers*

A good read overall, but fairly predictable. The fingerprints, the affair, etc, all pretty much telegraphed early on. Although I guess the "whodunit" wasn't the whole point of the story, was it? Also, I don't think it's possible to determine who a lifted fingerprint belongs to "at the scene", generally.

Posted by: Skane on November 8, 2005 08:31 AM

Nicely written. Kept me reading from beginning to end.

But... well, it does feel like a cliché, to tell the truth. The whole murder story, the dumb cops, the charming outsider who points out obvious details that absolutely EVERYONE else overlooked, and easily solves the whole deal... nothing new here, I'm afraid. Even the joke at the end. I think you're a good writer that needs to find an original theme. Or keep blogging. I enjoy your blog by the way.

Posted by: Aron on November 8, 2005 11:48 AM

Oh yeah, it's totally Encyclopedia Brown (or, to be less generous, Murder She Wrote). But, whatever -- first story I've written in 10 years, I'm just glad I got it on paper.

And you're right about the "whodunit" not being the point, Skane -- I knew that, the way I was structuring it, there was really only one possible culprit, thereby eliminating any mystery from the mystery. Hopefully in revising it I'll be able to throw in enough jokes to make up for its deficiencies (which is pretty much my strategy for everything in life, now that I think about it).

Posted by: Matthew on November 8, 2005 12:47 PM

Are you going to post the finished product after you edit? Or do we have to go out and buy Ellery Queen?

Posted by: Kim on November 9, 2005 06:55 AM

Great story! Good luck getting it published.

Posted by: Rob on November 12, 2005 07:11 PM

Finally had a chance to read it and it's a helluva first try and a helluva first draft. Yeah, the story is predictable, but the bright spot is our unlikely detective, Denver Colorado. Mystery writers make entire careers out of finding and developing that one interesting protagonist and I think you've found yours. There's something funny about a retired third grade teacher chasing down murderers.

Let's see, "Denver Colorado and the Seattle Slayer". "Denver Colorado and the Schoolhouse Murders". "Denver Colorado and the Funhouse Killer." Yeah, it's got legs.

Posted by: Davey on November 22, 2005 10:43 AM

BTW, check out the Nameless Detective series of books by Bill Pronzini. Good stuff.

Posted by: Davey on November 22, 2005 10:45 AM
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